i like this piece alot. very interesting and unique. in awe and jealous of your talents.

I v-much like this!

It's filled with drama, intrigue, and description.

Unexpected from a poem about jogging

I also like the time you put in between stanzas

Might sound wierd but it's like a diary of someone fighting to survive.

Thanks so much for the review.

I loved this poem, keep up the good work this goes on my fave stories it's great

Lowell Boston, I have decided to return your gracious favor.

You make really, really good use of figures of speech. Your metaphors are original and descriptive. My favorite part is beneath the 5:57 AM line. I love that you can integrate scientific terms and still be true to the abstractness of poetry. Many people can't do that, and many more just wouldn't. Your allusions near the end are dramatic and descriptive as well.

Ack, there was something else I was going to say, but I can't recall what it was. I'll remember right after I submit this, of course. Oh well.

I don't think I have any criticisms. There is just one line that doesn't quite "seem right" in my head:

of fatigue. Of quitting and walking home.

I would probably do it more like this:

of fatigue, of quitting
and walking home.

Of course, it's entirely up to you. Artistic liscense.

Overall, a completely wonderful poem. I don't have anything else to say.

Yeah! Go time poems! I liked this--It has a nice feel, as if the reader is there running along with you. Very nice--Kept my intrest.
-Amber

It has been a while. Good to see you are still writing.

This had vivid imagery and some interesting natural and social commentary. I'm not sure why you put so many line spaces during "I'm Spent... distilled...refined", but I think that is my only gripe.

Remy/The Blind Guardian