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| FoxyGrampa 2007-03-27 ch 1,   | Interesting concepts--I wish to know what they all tie into (technology or magic, I mean), but I expect to find that out later. My only real complaint is the bishi squad's HEIGHTS! JESUS H! Have you ever met a guy past "6'7?! I have, and he's a freakin' giant! Is this consistant throughout the world, or are they all unique with their physiques? Because if it's the latter, it's not only hard to believe, but it's kind of freakish, rather than suave. Tall men are cool, but too tall just borders on insane. It's not like it's all in legs or anything--everything else is big with them too. Then again, I'm a petite lady, so... o vo; There were as well some minor errors in grammar/mechanics. "What they said, go – no question asked." Should be: "What they said, went; no questions asked." Lead yourself away frm present tense. The rest I'll leave up to your eyes to find. Consider getting a beta to read over your works. Anyway... despite the casual way this is written, I can see this going somewhere. I'll be reading on. n_n; |
| Pandawan 2007-03-17 ch 6, | WOW! Not going to lie, absolutely in love with it! keep it up- it seems to have a very good plot... although, I do love the fact that he is amazingly powerful... but developement- not being perfect at everything- is real good too. but, ya... definitely favoriting it. |
| Gwynhafra 2007-03-07 ch 5, | lol. His PSI level killed the machine. If I were Bayle, I would kick Elroy where the sun doesn't shine... |
| Gwynhafra 2007-03-07 ch 4, | Hmm...I found it kinda amusing to see how possessive the dominants are over their bearers, but after a while I found it kinda annoying, coz they're too possessive. I liked Bayle's reason to become an Expert. |
| Gwynhafra 2007-03-07 ch 3, | Jada is such a stick... I wish Elroy luck, having such a crazy Bearer as his possible mate. lol |
| Gwynhafra 2007-03-07 ch 2, | *coughs politely* That has got to hurt, the fellow who was hit by the clumsy Bayle. "Stuck on this island with no females must have stunted their …growth a little. Why, they don’t even know what a fiancée is! No matter, he will teach them." This sentence was funny. |
| FUCK ME ARSE 2007-01-26 ch 1, | Derivative. |
| Gwynhafra 2007-01-25 ch 1, | About time you posted something! Be sure to update soon. ^^ |