Technical things first: stanzas, to get them on here go to quick edit/preview after you upload the story. Backspace all the little breaks that FP makes then enter in carefully your own breaks. That should work, if it doesn't let me know). That way you don't need to use the page line. Also, I don't think the center aligned lines work there, left aligned would for one make more sense and secondly, they're not interesting enough to be singled out. Since you do use some punctuation, do punctuate the whole piece. More periods and commas would help guide a reader in discerning an even flow and rhythm.

In terms of content, it's not bad but it feels quite cliched. You're telling us a lot more than you're showing. Imagery is key in poetry and verbs push it. Try to inject some unique quirks into this, if it's personal think of what makes your situation well yours.

Hopefully this was helpful.

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