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| Rodwen Fefalas 2007-02-12 ch 1,   | It would be better if you didn't refer to the fact that he doesn't make you feel the same as the other guy you're talking about. Maybe that's just me? Mostly the lines "but till you're asleep in my arms/ he will just have to do" makes it sound like you'll just take what you're offered and don't care much for it. |
| twirling flags 2007-01-30 ch 1, | Two words: AW. |
| shining defiance 2007-01-26 ch 1, | Very cute. Cutecutecute. I especially like the lines, "and I've found when I'm gone,/I don't miss him as much." Excellent flow in those two lines especially. Good job with your possesive apostrophes, too. :) |
| callmebelle 2007-01-26 ch 1, | aww, so sad... cute rhyming. |