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| no.peace.los.angeles 2008-02-10 ch 1,   | Oh, that's just nice. Nostalgic is really the right word. I love the way you thought about things here. It's so nice. :) Keep writing! :) |
| Solemn Coyote 2007-01-26 ch 1, | Mind not the nitpick. I love this. 1)"I know, I know, which one you ask." Period after the second 'know', comma after 'one'. 2)"Those seven sisters up on Castle Circle still go out dancing every night." Love that line. 3) Gods, but this is cool. Mixing fairy tale and modernity. Something I do whenever I get the chance. I'd really like to see more of this, if you feel like you can elaborate on the universe here. It's startlingly similar to something I've been developing, and I'd love to see how it plays out. 4) Thanks for posting this. |
| Sword On Fire 2007-01-26 ch 1, | This was very nice, but I think a bit ... condensed. If you spaced it out a little, into more than one paragraph, it'd make it easier on the eyes. But that's my only complaint. |
| cosaco 2007-01-26 ch 1, | *hug* love you i kinda wanna be picky 'bout punctuation and some other small stuff (whose, not who's, Prince Charming), but i love everything as is. all the actual stuff to it, not the little annoying stuff my internal beta bugs me about. from reading this, i just wanna get people together sometime, have a slumber party, and read to each other. i have plenty of old mother goose books and all the short stuff you read to your kid in bed. if we ever need a destress time (which is, like, constantly. so glad exams are over!) hope we can hang out sometime soon. ~CoSaCo |