by the way, i realized that signing it with "midnight" is for a reason. sorry for the confusion before.

i did like this poem, the rhyming went smoothly.

i noticed you repeated similar lines that were in your other poems such as "forever long" and "stupid song". it shows that your feelings are genuine and that the words are constantly on your mind.

i think if you continue to write, your poems will develop into more profound explanation of your feelings. be careful when you say things like "but that's just another verse." you don't want it to seem like the line is just there for the person of rhyming with the line before it.

i think you've got real potential, keep it up! =)

Good job on this one, keep it up.
--ShookieInLove