This is really good writing.

Wow...that was captivating. You have a good writing style. Even without knowing anything about the characters, I felt how tortured the POV character was...how she felt when her body was betraying her...and how she must have felt as she accepted defeat. Great work.

oh dat was really good ^_^

hot sexy and depressing
an amazing oneshot, im gist sad because of what mught have been

Wonderful. Absolutely brilliant. BRILLIANT.

nicely written with a dark point of view.
Good work
Looking forward to more.

... Best lesbian sex EVAR. Awesome job.

Wow. Just wow. This is just perfect. Hot, sultry, sexy and brilliant.

Wow. That was hot. Hehe. You should have added more to it. What the hell? I wanted to read more of it.

a good one

holy...this was the best short story (with a tasteful sex scene) I have read in a long time!! Congraz =D

WOW. One of the best erotic picease I have ever read. You appel to evey sense, and you such descrpitive words. You have alot of talent, and what i just love is the characters. They have this...complete hate for eachother, but it provides so much energy and creates so much lust between therm. God, I don't even know what to say, it is incredble.

Favorite, by the way

Hi Samira

I just wanted to congrat you for this story. It's so powerful and strong!

And also, wanted to kindly ask you to leave it as a one-shot. We see in the story there are lots of things we don't know. Who are these girls? Why are they enemies? How is it that they attract each other even if they are enemies? How many times has this happened? Why is there so much hate involved and how powerful is their attraction to each other? What is in her eyes?

It's perfect as a one-shot, as it arises so many questions. It creates expectation. Maybe if you continued the story it would not be so strong, it may even become dull. Knowing the answers to our questions is not always as rewarding as having the questions floating in the air in the first place.

Cheers and keep sharing these amazing stories with us!

Wow, cool. I really liked it, and if you decide to continue with this, you have a lot to work off of.

Like I said before-

Does it make me a dirty ** if I say I liked it?

Because, dirty ** or not, I liked it.

But you forgot a period in the last line of the first paragraph, that made me like it about .001% less.

I'm almost tempted to ask what prompted you to write this. But I don't think I will, that may cause an awkward conversation. :P

Keep writing, and don't forget your little friends from high school when you become the next... actually, you won't become the next anyone. You'll just be the first "Samira".