I loathe the word trees it's so angular and gaudy like neon french tips.

I really like this the flow is perfection.

This is just beautiful. I love the imagery you put in your words. The fear I sense in the last line sends shivers up my spine. Take care.

It's facscinating how you desplay all of this peaceful picture,s and then you smash the image at the end with "make it stop" very powerful. Your work is light, like a photograph, but it impacts heavily. I enjoyed it.

Juliet.

I really like this. It may be short but it's really good.

This is so elegantly woven together. It seems almost breakable how this is spun together. Trust me, that's a good thing. Excellent hesitations, and word placements. Great write.

reminds me of neverending moments. love the imagery in this. nice work.

Almost a lyrical tone to it. Love the sky line. Keep writing.

reminds me of broken merrygorounds

man, do i know that feeling. your poems are just soso pretty. i love them.

Reminds me of "Snails" by The Format. Lovely.

I think this would make an awesome song. If you write music, you should try doing something soft but fast-paced and melodic.

♥Christine

Interesting, very interesting. I found this a very abstract poem that had some kick to it. As for the part "The sky's my theatre, my memory machine" it was delightfully appealing to read. Keep it up! This was excellent!

-Joe

**. that's beautiful.

Cool imagery, it felt like I was reading a vividly coloured painting. Odd.

Keep writing,

Alan.