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somuchformyhappyending 2008-07-30 ch 22,	abuseHey! So I just read this entire story tonight and it was absolutely adorable. I loved it. and you're really talented. keep writing! Bec
just Merrit. 2008-07-01 ch 7,	abuseI love this story. Can't wait to finish it!
secondbaby15 2008-06-29 ch 22,	abusei wuv cute cubby little babies i wanna be a mommy someday ^-^
secondbaby15 2008-06-29 ch 21,	abuseyay finally he asked!
secondbaby15 2008-06-29 ch 19,	abuseaww i can't believe it them to married!! omg the thought is so cute!
secondbaby15 2008-06-29 ch 5,	abuseaw! zach is lexie's hero i love it
atreyu love 2008-04-01 ch 22,	abuseaww. that was so cute! im starting to see a pattern with your stories, the guys often LOVE to take care of their women, ALOT. lol its cute though :)
atreyu love 2008-04-01 ch 3,	abusekevin sucks.
AlyKat 2008-03-30 ch 22,	abuseHey girl. I've been reading your stuff today, and I had a couple thoughts for this one that I wanted to share. First off, I thought it was great! You really have a knack for character development and emotion! I've enjoyed reading all your stuff (and will comment on the others when I have time). A couple thoughts for this one... I didn't think there was quite enough development on why being a cop is such a horrible thing to Lexie. The last few chapters explained her fear because of her father's job and that sort of thing. But we never had a hint of that before she freaked out and broke up with Zach for being a cop. Try giving more detail about why she was so scared and why she couldn't handle it; it will make it a tad more believable. And second, there was that chapter you hated cuz of the legal mumbo jumbo. Maybe you could add more about Zach's interest in the trial, because that would act as some filler, but also as a bit of foreshadowing to his real profession. I liked the dialogue of him talking about the trial and her interrupting, maybe you could have her catch him reading more about it, or just show more of his interest in the trial and in rapes at Hyde Park. Just a thought, maybe it would work out? Hope that helped a little! Great work! (Would love it if you'd check out my stuff, although I did write it in high school a while back. :) Keep writing! -Alyssa
Freaksters 2008-03-06 ch 22,	abuseAww this was SO sweet!
not done baking 2008-02-15 ch 21,	abuseYou're an amazing writer, just be sure to keep the foreshadowing and wondering in there the entire time. Lexie didn't really wonder about Zach's job unless the argued about it in that chapter. I didn't feel like there was suspicion running through out the whole thing. Also, when writing in general, if you're going to have minute details in there (Abby's age) make sure you write it down somewhere, what Zach wrote changed from mystery to thriller and Lexie started off by saying she wanted to write for a newspaper to saying she wrote romance. On the other hand, certain details get repetitive, like Lexi's father dying at 15. Keep in mind though that I somehow managed to read this in one day. c: Samantha
AJS 2008-01-15 ch 22,	abuseI love your stories because they're always so cute and sweet and they really make me wish I could find a relationship like the ones you describe. However, there are a few things that I noticed in this story in particular, probably because there was more conflict (at least from what I can remember) in here than there was in your original Finding Alaska. Whenever you had fights or conflicts that arose between Zach & Lexie, you never really built them up. I feel like in the beginning, you should have shown Lexie's growing suspicions that Zach wasn't really a writer and her irritation for him refusing to tell her stuff rather than just skipping through weeks and just saying that yeah, everything had been great except for those little things. It would have been more effective if you helped us see it rather than just told us. I also think that Lexie's reasoning for running out on Zach once she found out he was a police was slightly flawed. It didn't really seem like she had a valid reason, judging by the reasons she gave, and it seemed like you just wanted there to be a reason but couldn't really find a valid one yourself. However, my reasoning for her being was somewhat different, and I think would have still worked out for you: Lexie could have been because Zach didn't trust her enough to tell her what he really did and that she would be able to keep the information confidential and wouldn't tell anyone. Likewise, Zach's reasoning for keeping that information from her didn't really make much sense either. I still am having a hard time trying to see how telling Lexie the truth after he started getting to know her would put her in danger, or would hinder his work, just because she knew his true identity. I think you should have also helped us see and took us through the stages in which Zach & Lexie were apart, and really gave us examples and situations in which Lexie just kind of found her life slipping back into a monotone, just going through the motions and not really living. You didn't really describe this either. Another issue was Abby's age... you said she was 8 months old at some point in the story (my memory of this is fuzzy) but I think at the time, Lexie had already been with Zach for a few months, and so for Abby to be 8 months old, it just didn't really make much sense since Lexie would have JUST gotten Abby right before Kevin through her out or something. It was just surprising to me, because seeing as Kev & Lexie's relationship was on the rocks for a while, and Kevin hated Abby, you wouldn't really think that he'd tolerate Abby at that stage in the relationship. I also think perhaps more build up to Lexie & Zach getting so close. You did this in Finding Alaska as well, and though I definitely admit that it does add some charm to your stories because it's something we all wish to experience, that immediate ease and comfort with a person, it's just not realistic that two people can be so comfortable around one another and trusting and loving without even really knowing the other person. I get that there are always those people who you'll connect with and feel at immediate ease with, but your characters seem to slip into relationship-stage right away, when in reality, there's usually at least just a little transitional phase. Anyways, despite all these comments, I really did enjoy your story a lot, and I love the charm you add to them :) However, I think I liked Finding Alaska better :p I'm not sure why - I guess it just bothered me too that Zach was keeping so much from Lexie the entire time, and that he didn't just tell her. I don't see how it would have impacted them... anyways, please continue writing! And don't lose that sweet charm your stories seem to have :) -- Alyssa
Erisah Mae 2008-01-12 ch 22,	abuseThis story is very well done- a couple of nice twists, and overall a fun read. Erisah
bubblie130 2008-01-02 ch 22,	abusethat story was so cute ☺
tasi13 2007-11-04 ch 2,	abusei love your story but i want to know where it takes place.

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