Um... this seems to be a rampant problem among fp authors: In criminal cases, the victims do not have attorneys. The state has an prosecutor. While that person would meet with Lexi, they would not be hired by her. It seems that not many people on this website realize this, so you're not alone. Other than that, this is a good story; I think that the two characters are pretty darn cute.

Ello again!! I've been going through your stories, cuz i've been looking for a sappy romance(i need them sometimes)and when i found out that my personal fav. Finding Alaska wasnt on, i had to look for something else. I really like this one :D and right now my hands are itching.. it's been a while since i wrote anything... bloody finals. Anyhow, just thought to tell you how much I like this story!

Ta!
M.Angel

You have done really well with this story!
I am loving Zach's and Lexie's relationship so far..
In fact, I love all your stories.
WelldoneWelldoneWelldone!

Such a cute story! Great job :)

Hey! So I just read this entire story tonight and it was absolutely adorable. I loved it. and you're really talented. keep writing!

Bec

I love this story.
Can't wait to finish it!

i wuv cute cubby little babies i wanna be a mommy someday ^-^

yay finally he asked!

aww i can't believe it them to married!! omg the thought is so cute!

aw! zach is lexie's hero i love it

aww. that was so cute!
im starting to see a pattern with your stories,
the guys often LOVE to take care of their women, ALOT. lol
its cute though :)

kevin sucks.

Hey girl. I've been reading your stuff today, and I had a couple thoughts for this one that I wanted to share. First off, I thought it was great! You really have a knack for character development and emotion! I've enjoyed reading all your stuff (and will comment on the others when I have time).
A couple thoughts for this one... I didn't think there was quite enough development on why being a cop is such a horrible thing to Lexie. The last few chapters explained her fear because of her father's job and that sort of thing. But we never had a hint of that before she freaked out and broke up with Zach for being a cop. Try giving more detail about why she was so scared and why she couldn't handle it; it will make it a tad more believable.
And second, there was that chapter you hated cuz of the legal mumbo jumbo. Maybe you could add more about Zach's interest in the trial, because that would act as some filler, but also as a bit of foreshadowing to his real profession. I liked the dialogue of him talking about the trial and her interrupting, maybe you could have her catch him reading more about it, or just show more of his interest in the trial and in rapes at Hyde Park. Just a thought, maybe it would work out?
Hope that helped a little! Great work! (Would love it if you'd check out my stuff, although I did write it in high school a while back. :)
Keep writing!
-Alyssa

Aww this was SO sweet!

You're an amazing writer, just be sure to keep the foreshadowing and wondering in there the entire time. Lexie didn't really wonder about Zach's job unless the argued about it in that chapter. I didn't feel like there was suspicion running through out the whole thing. Also, when writing in general, if you're going to have minute details in there (Abby's age) make sure you write it down somewhere, what Zach wrote changed from mystery to thriller and Lexie started off by saying she wanted to write for a newspaper to saying she wrote romance. On the other hand, certain details get repetitive, like Lexi's father dying at 15. Keep in mind though that I somehow managed to read this in one day.

c:

Samantha