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| cinnamon-24 2007-09-08 ch 11,  | abuseI like it, but "loner?" |
| cinnamon-24 2007-09-08 ch 7, | abuseAW! |
| cinnamon-24 2007-09-08 ch 6, | abuseDarn Warren Taylor for messin that moment up! hehe |
| Me (Spaz Me) 2007-06-06 ch 4, anon. | abuse...but not ffn at school, i mean. Sorry. Typo. |
| Me (Spaz Me) 2007-06-06 ch 3, anon. | abuseVery good, Emma. I've already read this, but it's just as good as i remember (though i'm wondering if u did any major editing). It isn't as good as ur newer bits, but that should be expected. A little more... abrupt. U know that u can get onto this but not at school? Weird... |
| Romania 2007-05-30 ch 15, | abuseA very happy ending. I thought that maybe Martin would shoot Alaric as soon as he let Rose go. Whatever. Nice story. I had a fun time reading it. |
| Romania 2007-05-30 ch 10, | abuseI do like this chapter. It has a lot of climax in it. |
| Romania 2007-05-30 ch 9, | abuseOK, this chapter got me worried. I'm seriously thinking that there is something wrong with Alaric's head and that he will hurt someone, as much as he might not know why. I'll review again once I get farther in the story. |
| Romania 2007-05-30 ch 4, | abuseI take it back, I now see why they were in such a hurry to get back home. |
| Romania 2007-05-30 ch 3, | abuseWere they not going some other place before Rose was taken by Alaric? What happened to that? How would their father worry if he thought they were safely somewhere else? |
| InkIllusionist 2007-05-06 ch 15, anon. | abuseBRAVO! Very climactic ending..much feeling and excellent writing. your writing style has definitely progressed since the beginning of the story! excellent ending! write more stories! |
| phantom-jedi 2007-04-24 ch 15, | abuseA slightly abrupt ending, but not bad. An epilogue might be in order, but that is your decision. Let me know if you start writing something new! phantom_jedi P.S. Do you have any idea what's happening on The alerts have been down for quite some time. |
| phantom-jedi 2007-04-13 ch 14, | abuseGood chapter! The plot thickens a bit. What will our 'murderer' try next? phantom_jedi |
| InkIllusionist 2007-04-04 ch 13, anon. | abusewell well well!! I am so glad u updated! The dream sequence was superbly written! Some of your best work so far. The flow of one scene to another in the dream was amazing! The imagery was fantastic. Her pitying Alaric brings a nice twist to the plot, rather than her just being the weak, feeble female and being afraid of him. Very good. good luck writing! |
| phantom-jedi 2007-04-03 ch 13, | abuseA little fluff is okay, so long as it doesn't bog down the story. Make sure that there's enough action to keep the reader interested! Update soon! phantom_jedi |