Ahh, for some bizarr-o reason, I love listening to your work in the voice of my Maximilian...velvet voice aside, LOVE your words to a point of tears. I -adore- this feeling that bestows upon me as I read of broken wings. Amiable words yet again.

all i can say is...YES! this is wonderful. great concept, nice work!

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oh freeking wow. GOOD JOB!
i luv ur summery tho. writing is who i am and i cant let people take that from me!

A deep poem, that is for sure! I do have a few comments for you.

The breaking of thoughts into lines is a little choppy and difficult to read. I would suggest adding/changing punctuation or making some of the lines longer.

Your use of metaphor is wonderfully well done. Keep up the good work!

phantom_jedi