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| tashe19 2008-06-11 ch 1,  | abuseNice. The emotional imagery in this piece was evocative, and you say a lot in very few words. Your description of not only the suffering, but the seperation, bitterness and despair that victims of AIDS often feel, was, I think, very well done. The only critism I have to offer is that in a few instances, your dialoge is slightly awkward- things like "You think I'm infected also?" are rather jarring for me. Good short story. |
| BrokenHeartedAngel 2007-01-27 ch 1, | abusewow good job. i dont know alot about this kinda thing- heck i dont know ANYTHING about this kind of thing! GOOD JOB |