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| bukangliwayway 2007-03-21 ch 1,  | abusevery vivid! you painted a cliche-ish dramatic situation with rainbow colors! *adds to favorites* |
| The Salt Lake Queen 2007-02-27 ch 1, | abuseI really, really love it. Beautiful poem. |
| Countess Chocula 2007-01-31 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. I love the last four or so lines especially. I'm running out of adjectives to describe your poetry. |
| poetic abortion 2007-01-30 ch 1, | abuseGuh. This is, uh, hot. Really really hot. The last whole image--part--just does it for me; I think it is just the ["you are the only girl i'll ever fuck" and you know that i mean more than that, you know i mean the words i have never said"] is just so lovely. Wow. - Noelle |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-01-29 ch 1, | abuseOoh, wow. I love the feel of this - how it feels like a confessional, and it just keeps spinning and spinning and you can't stop reading it. Very nice. You have great details, and yeah, just a great piece. Keep writing! :) |
| Starving Artist 2007-01-28 ch 1, anon. | abuse*Big grin* You I'm going to love anything you write when you mention werewolves. I find this to be one of the most real poems you've written. I like that...a lot. By "real", I mean, one that you've only taken slight poetical license with. I like the emotion in this...and the setting. Sometimes, things are more clearly seen in the near-dark. Anyway, my favorite parts: "like the werewolf she wishes she was and under that night sky I whisper lullabies as old as time itself"..."my love is twofold once you begin to undress"..."and you know that i mean more than that, you know i mean the words i have never said". Beautiful. That's really all that can be said. |
| lackluster 2007-01-28 ch 1, | abusei love the ending the most. especially "as i bring you close to insanity". it's just...gah. you make my brain melt and i love it. wonderful. |