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| Annora 2008-08-16 ch 3, anon. | abusegosh i love this story please update again soon! |
| WriterGurl123 2008-07-09 ch 3,  | abuseI love this story, I wish there were more chapters because I totally want to see her and Tristan together. |
| Moonlight-Lilly 2008-07-09 ch 3, | abusethis is really good. i cant wait to read what happens next! |
| runswiththevampires 2008-07-07 ch 3, | abusewell, i like it, if that counts for anything. its cute. super cute. you should keep writing. its very good. you can't just give up, i mean, the whole plot is cool; it reminds me when i used to play softball. . . you just need to keep updating and you'll get lots of readers and reviewers. promise. i had the same problem, with the no readers thing, but after a while, i had lots of readers. so, if you decide to update, i'll read it. ^_^ |
| booklvr101 2008-07-07 ch 3, | abusethis is a pretty cool story. i like it a lot. you should totally keep writing it. let people no how cool it is. |
| BrownEyedBeauty 2007-06-20 ch 2, | abuseI love it. Update soon! |
| slightlyaddictedx3 2007-04-03 ch 2, | abuseomg. u left us with a cliffhanger or watever its called. that was really good. if you continue i'll review u everytime u update! XD please... :[ |
| Onion Ring 2007-03-21 ch 2, | abuseI'm not going to lie. It is hard to read because the grammar needs some incredible work. When you have dialogue.. you need to capitalize the first letter of the first word because it is a sentence, after all. Some of the sentences make no sense because they lack a subject, verb, or direct object... And you need to use contractions like I'm and not im... Maybe proof read or get a beta reader? |
| blue.eyes.can.be.deceiving 2007-03-16 ch 2, | abuseloved this chapter..! |
| blue.eyes.can.be.deceiving 2007-03-16 ch 1, | abusei love this story. and i love softball. sadly i dont play for my school. but i've been playin on and off for years.. anywho, u dont care about that, this is a great story, i cant wait for more.! |
| CarlyJo 2007-02-26 ch 2, | abuseThis is a really good story. I like it. As for a title...I don't know. Try a play on words about the unexpected love between Tristan and Kyra, the love-hate-love relashonship. Does he love her? UPDATE SOON! |
| Hello.... 2007-02-26 ch 2, anon. | abuseit's really good but you have a few errors in your gramma and spelling. try and leave a line between conversations. sorta like this: "hello" "Hi, how are you?" "good, thanks." keep up the great work! |
| soccerbabe16 2007-02-25 ch 2, | abuselove it so far, can't wait to see what happens. |
| Writing4Eternity 2007-01-30 ch 1, | abuseI like is but try to limit the cusing. |
| a little girl 2007-01-29 ch 1, | abusehey! C: your story's great! pls continue! hehehe... C: |