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| A Wandering Thought 2008-05-04 ch 4,   | Your sentences and passages are so strange...I love the imagery they inspire. I'll have to watch this one. |
| Nemonus 2007-12-16 ch 1, | Very good. Very depressing, but each line is poignant and there are themes that run through them. Some of the sentences, such as "The storm tosses the ship and crews beseech the gods to take their bodies from the gulls to white sanded beaches and soft yellow skies." are overlong, but they are the exceptions to the fine rhythms. I think my favorite phrase is "the last invisible man left in the world." (there, though, I think that the word 'left' is optional.) There are fantastic concepts throughout. |
| half-sketched.staccatos 2007-07-17 ch 1, | konnichi wa I don't know how to describe this because it's just so outstanding. I can tell you one thing: I've never read anything like it before. This is absolutely amazing! *favs* Wonderful job! Zaijen -Shan- |
| she smolders 2007-03-10 ch 1, | Just one line, can affect me too. I like this a lot. |
| MacNWoody 2007-03-08 ch 1, | wow, this has a sucker punch...and I still don't know what it means! but the imagery is so potent...good job! |
| manasa-dong 2007-02-15 ch 1, | Very exquisite. They all stand alone very well, and all come together just as beautifully. I love the wording and imagery very much. Isn't this a story in itself? Infinitely more meaningful, thought provoking, and beautiful than if you had written it as a "story". It wasn't that you didn't know how to write it, you knew how to not write it. |
| Xerophyte 2007-02-11 ch 1, | Oh wow. I love this so much...it's simply amazing. It seemed a bit disjointed in a few places, but it all comes together at the end. I just can't get over how much I love this! [+fav] It is truly amazing where you can go from one good line... |
| Femaleking 2007-02-08 ch 1, | Wow. This is just amazing. I've never seen something written like this before and probably not everyone could make it work, but you did. It's like you opened little windows to worlds where we can see only a small detail and not the whole picture, but those details are beautiful by themselves. I love this line: 'Eyes burned with fiery tears and eyelashes sizzled when they ran down her cheeks' It's just unexpected. You're a really talented writer. ^^ (Saves story to favourites) |