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| Lee Litchka 2007-01-31 ch 2,   | This is getting even more interesting. I applaud your ability to tell a good story. |
| Mordred2007 2007-01-31 ch 2, | Ah, I must say, this was really good. It was better than a lot of stuff coming through teh fantasy section, and I can truthfully say you kept me hooked. Seriously. What I liked most was the shifting POVs, and it helped sculpt your characters a lot more. So far, I don't have anything to really say, seeing as they story is really well-written. So... yeah. i'm just awaiting an update. |
| AletheaCole 2007-01-30 ch 2, | Guh- I hate fictionpress and I'm getting a new ID as soon as I'm done with this. So, the Lysy would like to say she muchly adores your whiny little Vert. She would also like to note that his character changes a little between chapters one and two- not a bad thing, but something of note. Also, the Lysy adores Bliss and is thinking of helpful ways to kill her- maybe it shall have something to do with Skrymer? Maybe Vert can happily kill her off himself? Again, as I said last night, a little more time spent in camp, or fighting off bandits along the way to the next segment ;) may make Vert's insight into Konran more believeable later on. And, um, to repeat what I said last night- you get to be a god/godess based entirely on the belief in you as such, hence why the angelus, demonai and humans were created. Ta-dah! And now I must really freaking change my Pen Name as it irritates me to no end. Love your story! |
| Lee Litchka 2007-01-29 ch 1, | This is a great story and very well written. I hope to see more from you in the near future. |