Reviews for City Where Men are Mended

Radio Saturday
2007-01-30
ch 1,

abuseThis is nice, and very mature for a twelve year old. When I look at some of the stuff I wrote when I was twelve, all I can do is shudder, but this is very good. I like that you preserve the meter, but don't have a real rhyme scheme. That's cool.

I did feel that the fourth and fifth verses seemed a little out of place, however. While they're still quite good, they just seem to place the poem a little too much, when it works so well without a definite setting. When you talk about how "He had it all in his home in the mountains," and "Here are the Nazis who killed all the Jews," you bring it back down into reality a little too much. I only say this because the rest of it is a little more eternal -- a new take on "Abandon all hope, ye who enter here!"

But it's very good, and I applaud you for your work. If you did this three years ago -- am I right there? -- I'm pretty frightened of the kind of talent that must reside in your more recent works.

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