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| Nemonus 2007-03-05 ch 1,   | "1 fountain pen (no ink)" How does Basil know it has no ink? Good description of the magics and the effort required. It reminds me of the magic in 'The Dresden Files', if you've read that. "our car was a nephil in disguise." Is this shortened name correct? What a delightful concept, though. While "It peeked its sleek head up and stared at us with silvery eyes before chirping happily" is an excellent description, I want more about the shape of the thing. The original use for 'nephilim' is 'angel'. I wasn't expecting the eel-dragon thing I'm picturing. Give a physical description for the cop. lol, I like the wierd originality in this story. Good job. |