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envirofriendlykrissooo 2008-08-08 ch 1,	abuseIt is pretty simple, but don't blame it on your teenage inexperience... In the second to last line where you switched to 'if you' instead of the consistent 'if I' it felt a bit off. More like you were questioning yourself rather then the subject. Which is fine of course, it just threw me for a sec. What I like best is how the reader is able to relate. Most people, having experienced such a friendship, have asked similar if not the same questions. It makes me want to reminisce almost. Anyhow, I like it, even though you seem to think it lacks emotion and imagery.
Everything to you 2008-01-02 ch 1,	abuseYou know what, don't listen to anyone who said they didn't like it. I love it. It is the questions one in love would ask yes. But as people call it unorignal, I don't see why because I haven't seen it on writing with that. Just because people feel that way and have those questions doesn't mean its unorignal. Any I loved it. it made me smiled, and remind me of the same questions I had for my boyfriends, or just crushed I had. ~Everything to You
JaneBarrie 2007-08-21 ch 1,	abuseThis on seemed to lack the emotion I've read in your other works. And When you changed from "I" to "you," it seemed a bit out of place. -J.B.
Mosaic Stains 2007-08-19 ch 1,	abuseWell, this one I found a bit void of emotion. It does seem a bit original and predictable, but that isn't what doesn't exactly catch my fancy about it. The void of emotion does. Nonetheless it's cute. ~M.S. "If we could catch the sun by every ray, then we'd always have a bright day."
ryansheart 2007-08-19 ch 1,	abuseAbsolutely wonderful. Those are probably the questions anyone in love would ask. Unfortunately I am not one of those people. I just found it a bit abrupt when you changed the "If I" to "If you" but that's probably just me. Once again, great job. Isabella.x [reviewerss_found]
JellyBeaner 2007-07-14 ch 1,	abuseI really like this. First of all I think it's fend "for" me, not just fend me. I felt it was kind of inconsistent at the end when you just switch to If "you" do something versus all the other If "I"s that are the basis of the poem. I'm not a big fan of poetry, but I like things like this, poems that get you in the heart.
cerberouszerog 2007-05-13 ch 1,	abusenot exactly ur best from what I've seen... simple and too unoriginal... I didn't really like this one to say the truth...
M.D.Irvine 2007-05-12 ch 1,	abusehmm not to sure what i think about this one, maybe because it feels unoriginal. i could predict the next words like some love songs u hear on the radio.
-insertsomethinguniquehere- 2007-05-09 ch 1,	abuseThis is cute. Although, it's not very original. Also, in the first line, it says "world." I think you meant to write "would."
The Ferrett 2007-05-07 ch 1,	abuseAw. That is so sweet. ::)) I especially like the line "If I fall, would you catch me?" It is what every person wnats to hear (so I'm a hopeless male romantic)
paper bell 2007-02-16 ch 1,	abuseO: sad. sad sad. sadd. nice poem. maybe a lil too flat, without metaphors, but still, nice. sad. good work! keep writing :D ` MCHLV; < 3 felia.
ShadowFane 2007-01-31 ch 1,	abuseI LOVE THIS! I think I wrote something like this once, but I like yyours better! Great job! SF P.S. I just read your “Men; can't live with them, can't stuff them in the trunk of a car...” quote outloud...with my boyfriend on the phone...:) Lovely reaction...Lol...
JezabelRomih 2007-01-30 ch 1,	abuseMe gusta. Este poema lo escribiría en una tarjeta en una ocasión especial. Y no se por qué, pero lo utilizaría para un chico :) Pregunta por una amistad muy intensa, y la asociaría más a un comienzo de amor. Es genial que tan pocas líneas puedan decir tanto, es directo. Por cierto, si prefieres los comentarios en inglés, dímelo ;)
Princess-anna57 2007-01-29 ch 1,	abuseSimple yet effective. Good. Keep writing. ~Anna~ ^_^

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