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| Tytherpol 2007-11-02 ch 1,  | abusei hate how honest this is. well okay i lied, i love it. this is a really cool poem. i like the second stanza a lot. |
| Hemlock 2007-07-12 ch 1, | abuseYeah, we all are doing something... and this sums what we do everyday, just to get by. |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2007-07-09 ch 1, | abusei like that expression- "excite yourself stupid." not a bad little poem. it didn't immediately grab me- but there's an intriguing sleepy quality to it- like a voice heard in a dream. |
| sleeping Pisces 2007-03-19 ch 1, | abuseBy far the most interesting peice of writing I've read in a long time. The language is sharp and real, and reading it was a pleasure. |
| Midnight In Eden 2007-02-11 ch 1, | abuseHaha this is great. For once someone is writing something interesting. Although I would kill your two "and"s because they are boring words that lend nothing. Let those lines run together instead. Nice though. .:midnight:. |
| lackluster 2007-01-30 ch 1, | abusethe depiction of this feeling, this dream, this "experience" is simple yet thought-provoking. i feel like i'm trying to say something quite simple with too many words. but it's a lovely poem. |
| Damien Vlashtov 2007-01-30 ch 1, | abusePoetic. Fairly sad. Well written - good job. |