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Reviews For: You See

lomz 2008-02-23 ch 1,	abusei see. don't mind me, i crack myself up. and please ignore criticism about your vocabulary choices it doesn't sound forced at all
starry-nights206 2007-05-25 ch 1,	abuseYAY anacrostics! :) The trick is to make the sentence unnoticable and I think you did a very good job with that. It might be just me, but I think that the vocab. distracts a bit from the reading grabs dictionary Otherwise, it's great. Thank you for your review on poetsanctuary btw, much appreciated.
imsorandom 2007-05-21 ch 1,	abusehell is tears?? loved it!
ohthevoices 2007-04-03 ch 1,	abuseI'm a fan of alliteration. Don't use it much myself, but it's still fun. Great poem!
Liv-and-die 2007-03-22 ch 1,	abusefirst- let me get the thirteen year old in me out. acrostic with alliterations = coolness. :) i was going to review one of your haikus, but ive found that reviewing something I don't know how to write probably isn't the smartest idea :] first off- its a beautiful idea, something that sets the mood. i love it. the alliterations don't remind you of someones kindergarten poem. the trouble i find with my own poetry is if it is beautiful read outloud- and yours is. i love the sinfulness at the end. its so beautiful. :)
Michael l'oeil fol 2007-02-16 ch 1,	abuseim a fan of alliteration myself...a nice little poem MLF
FutureActress 2007-02-11 ch 1,	abuseWow, this is definatly different, but in a really good way. I really enjoyed this, keep it up!
The Un-great-ful 2007-02-09 ch 1,	abusehell is tears. Acrostic poetry. You also used alliteration in every line if i'm not mistaken. I do that occasionally, it makes my work flow better, when I want it to. I've only ever posted one of my acrostics, it was the one I liked the least. Interesting poem, your word use was fun. Alan.
All Alone With Her Thoughts 2007-02-07 ch 1,	abuseHell is tears? I'm assuming that's the kudos part. Nicely done. Thanks for the review! Yes, the rhyme scheme was suppose to be like that. ^_^ Rowan.
magnusthewolf 2007-02-06 ch 1,	abusehaha i liked it...nicely done! kudos to you! :) magnus
she smolders 2007-02-06 ch 1,	abuse"hell is tears" that's an intriguing thought. I like your use of alliteration.
IwasSmitten 2007-02-06 ch 1,	abuseIt's great alliteration with a nice flow. Thanks for the review.
emeraude-irlandais 2007-02-03 ch 1,	abuseThe sad thing is, I was screaming in my head "hell is tears!! I wonder if they realize tha--" and then I read the author's note. I depress myself. Because I am an alliteration whore, I love this. Plus, "egg eyes" is...review-worthy on its own, I just don't quite know why. `~bella~`
ronshaberry 2007-02-03 ch 1,	abuseHello, hello! Okay, first of all, cool thing done with the alliteration and acrosticity. This might sound like an insult, but it almost reads like a tongue twister. And I don't mean it as an insult, but what I'm trying to say the techniques you use give it a fun, trippy feeling that plays along with what you might say is a more heavy topic. Like hell. And sin. And sex. Lots of it! Heh. The dark and heavy torture of my being! Okay, no. I'll just have to say I don't have such a good vocabulary as yourself, so I looked up aphrodiasic... And I'm thinking you spelled it incorrectly? My dictionary says aphrodisiac. I'm not sure, but maybe you could look it up or something. Another thing I'm not sure of is... are you talking about aphrodisiac as a noun or an adjective... Are you comparing excitement to being an aphrodisiac? I guess there's another thing you could think about clarifying. Then again, it just might be my own confusion, since you're using words I'm not familiar. But I really like this. Definitely trippy; this poem really excels at giving the reader (well, at least me) mixed feelings of sorts. Great. :D
Sarah DeLane 2007-01-30 ch 1,	abusehell is tears Oh, that is quite neat. (Thank you for the concrit.)

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