Reviews for Defining Chemistry

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Limited Edition 2007-09-23 ch 1,	abuseThe beginning is pretty...boring. I'm not too fond of the "waking up and going to school" scenario, since it's the beginning of practically every other story here of FP. So it didn't do much for making me interested. A beginning should either be interesting because you KNOW something will happen very very soon and it's very suspenseful, or with the conflict being presented right away. But in this beginning, no conflict is clearly presented and I don't feel like there is something boiling under the surface either. The language is versatile and vivid without being over the top. I like the descriptions. The way it closes in on the characters is good because it's natural and not forced. They're introduced through the happenings and not by "Hi, I'm Sarah, I'm 17, have blue eyes and a big butt" (i.e the match dot com ad). I like the small details; like Liam's worry showing through idle touching etc. They bring the characters to life. The balance between dialogue and description is poor. There's simply too much dialogue. (Can you tell that I'm not a fan of Gilmore Girls? It gives me headache. For days.) Ah well, good job!
urjellingcauseimevil 2007-07-06 ch 10,	abusego adian go adian* happy dance* U UPDATED! WOOT! if i could i would give u some chocolate.Kalryie is so cool i mean she ROCKS!!. liam is cool too thou. over all this story is KICK **. Love Peace. Update. Kira
The-only-Bex 2007-07-05 ch 1,	abusePlease write more! :) This story is very interesting its not like most Romance stories and i like that. It gave me a welcome break from my life lol So write more! And i want more Kalryie and Aiden action! and Liam coz he is funny. By the way how do you pronounce Kalryie? Bex x
Elfish Suicide 2007-07-01 ch 10,	abuseI think we need Mia to have a couple, and I was wondering, this IS a Aidan/Kalryie love story, right? I luv it so much! Update Soon and review my story!
blindsight 2007-06-30 ch 10, anon.	abusecant wait for the next chapter update... i seriosly want to no whats going to happen and its one of the reaasons i cnt stop trying 2 figure out where ur going woth this story
LachelleMarie 2007-06-30 ch 10,	abuseOnce again I love where you are going with the story. As to something you can do, haha I wish I could help you but I would end up making your characters depressed and angsty haha. I am a complete angst writer. Anyways I just wanted to say that part of me Hopes what Kalyrie (had to look her name back up because i am awful at spelling) said comes true and in fact you know they just get together and then go back to being friends, with one of them still madly in love with the other one and the other part is just like aww make them fall in love. :) Update soon.
urjellingcauseimevil 2007-06-25 ch 9,	abusehey chica! sup girl?! thank god u updated butsniffle no adian. made me sad. IM SO CUNFUZZELED! i mean one chapter i think Tyler is good and nice, then Mia starts making her point then Dana is all " U DONT NO WHAT HE HAS GONE THRU!!" all i know right now is that Adian is my hero.hehe
LachelleMarie 2007-06-23 ch 6,	abuseI love this story. It is really great. Your writing style is smooth and flows well and to be honest I have not found many or any at all mistakes. Update soon!
urjellingcauseimevil 2007-06-19 ch 8,	abuseupdate. NOW. hyperventilates
bad.karma44 2007-06-13 ch 1,	abuseI'm a tad confused about the relationships between everyone but I still really like it...
SilverWildfire 2007-06-07 ch 7,	abuseI'm enjoying this so far, not as 'light' as some of the pieces available on this, which I think is a good thing. Sets you apart. And there's nothing wrong with using the profanities - I'm at Uni, and people here swear a lot. It's today's culture. Good work so far, keep going :)
Apiavva 2007-06-06 ch 7,	abuseWoot!! An update...was wondering when that was going to happen...Anyway...good work...loved the girl lesson...can't wait til the next one
cheesecake.thief 2007-04-09 ch 6,	abuseThis is one of the only Ice Princess stories I actually like... Her friends support her character so well in the story, there's so much bulk in the contents :)
Writer/Reader 2007-04-08 ch 1, anon.	abuseI understand that dialogue is a powerful thing, but when you use "**" and what it kinda takes away from the whole story and truthfully it's kind of unnecessary.
Apiavva 2007-03-07 ch 5,	abuseI can't believe that I have not reviewed this yet. I have it on alerts. I can't wait for the rehearsal either. I like Kalryie...I could picture her so clearly in that last ch...Hurry and write more!

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