True, it may be a bit common. But how you describe and illerate the scene is too sweet (in a good way). Like cherry flavored-barbwire or chocolate covered blood stains.

And how is liquid diamonds a common term? I've never even heard that phrase until I read this poem. It's an interesting play on words.

"And Smile"

I loved it. I wish so bad that I could give you some constuctive critque, but, I'm kinda sorta agains that with poetry you know (kind of hypocritical, since i like getting it) But, I feel that the poem is the person's own art, and should not be changed or told needs work. saying all that, I really, really, truly liked it. I loved the part about liquid diamons flowing down her cheek. Oh, and I could picture it! I like it just the way it is.

Peace and Love

~> Lifted

It's not **... you're right, it could do with improvement, but it has potential.

"Torn wings and tragedies look good on her.
She could completely destroy herself
And I would still worship the ground she
Bleeds upon."

I really like that part. It flows really well, just good lines.

There's too many cliches, though. I pretty much hate the word crimson from overuse. And liquid diamonds is a bit common, though pretty. Broken beautiful... I always loved it... but it's just too typical now. Those four lines are too good to be in the same poem as those.

I can't really give any more advice, but I really do love those four lines. The rest, I think, weighs it down. Work with those. They're golden.

Keep writing! :)