Hmm. Mixed feelings. I like it, but please tell me that you're writing more. With the setup you've got here, this is novel-grade substance. Keep it up.

Also, give it some proofreading next time. Sorry to go grammar-Nazi on you.

Umm...scary /

Wow. You are amazing... not only in your revolutionary ideas, but also in your ability to express them in a way that makes us all stop. I'm completely blown away, it was brilliant. The whole time I kept thinking of Ray Bradbury...This definately has that same eerie feel as "Farenheit 451."