Reviews for Formal Challenge 02

Reviews For: Formal Challenge 02 - Reviews: Page 1 of 4

ylaenek 2007-03-02 ch 1, anon.	abuseMechanics - Myriad Originality -Fenrir Best - Myriad
E. Greye 2007-03-01 ch 1, anon.	abusebest: blackcat original: storm cat mechanics: myriad sorry this is so close to the deadline (hopefully not over) my world has been crazy as of late. A good batch this month, though!
Raven Kay 2007-02-28 ch 1,	abuseBest: Stormcat Originality: Myraid and Stormcat Mechanics: Myraid
Meilan Firaga 2007-02-28 ch 1,	abuseMechanics: Myriad Originality: Stardust Best: Myriad
Elizabeth Anne Ensley 2007-02-28 ch 1,	abuseThis is really a tough call, but: —Mechanics—The one with the best grammar, punctuation, spelling, and flow. The best from a technical point of view. Wicked By Myriad —Originality—The most imaginative use of the required pieces. The best from a creative point of view. Greenglass Pt. 1 By: Fenrir —Best—The overall best story; the best read. The best from a reader’s point of view. Meeting A Purple Haired hottie By: BlackCat I hope that works. ^^;;
Elizabeth Anne Ensley 2007-02-28 ch 11,	abusesnicker deleterius?
Elizabeth Anne Ensley 2007-02-28 ch 10,	abuseHeart of a Soul By Jane Ellecot Cute! But it goes to show you that you shouldn't judge by appearances. His might have been a closer guess (she said nothing about Gothness to him). It feels like the beginning of a longer piece, too. I've put you on my watch list (SnapesAngel) at DeviantArt.
Elizabeth Anne Ensley 2007-02-28 ch 9,	abuseGreenglass Pt. 1 By: Fenrir “She’s already leaving, you fool. She hasn’t displayed anythinguseful yet, and then she’ll be outside the perimeter!”" Needs space between "anything" and "useful". ;-) Interesting little story. Is she an AI?
Elizabeth Anne Ensley 2007-02-28 ch 8,	abuseFighting Destiny By Henred5 I enjoyed reading your story, but the punctuation threw me out of it often enough that--well, I Googled a link for you: http://w.uottawa.ca/academic/arts/writcent/hypergrammar/punct.html That's basically a punctuation workshop primer. I think that the first part, about the comma, is the one you need the most right now. I like this, though, and the healing jam... snicker Great part!
Akemi-san 2007-02-28 ch 1,	abuseMechanics: Myriad ... Originality: Stormie ... Best: Blackcat
Elizabeth Anne Ensley 2007-02-28 ch 7,	abuseWicked By Myriad I happen to be a fan of X-Mn and a lot of the Mutant stories, so of course this drew me right off. I liek the scenario, and that you've twisted the Sue/Stu thing on its ear. I jsut have one nit: "Grace is nine, and he wings only started growing about a week or so ago," Grace is nine, and her wings only started growing about a week or so ago, And the mix of Spanish and English doesn't bother me. I wrote soemthing awhile ago, and folks complained about it because I used some Spanish too (I had to go to a web page for it), but it wasn't all that much. I had one person complain about it, not that many folks commented at all--I think hers was the only comment. That was pathetic, for a writing prompt. Still, some things (like what you had, and what I had) should be clear, from the xontext. And yes, Google can translate (abysmally). I thought this was done well. Thanks for the read. ;-)
Elizabeth Anne Ensley 2007-02-28 ch 6,	abuseKirsten Bell’s Blonde Life First Day on the Job By: Pixiefied One Hi! This was cute. I liked the story overall. I just have a few technical nits. Please don't shoot me! ^__^;; "she wondered idly over toward the register" she wandered idly over toward the register "Sighing again, she rested her chin in her hand and rested her elbow on the cash counter and stared out the door." Bah. They point it out to me when I do soemthing like that, so I'm passing it on you you. Repetition of "rested" and "readted". I liek the first use the best. Yuo can use a word like "propped" to replace the second one, or something like it. ;-) "Just when Kirsten figured she would kill over due" Just when Kirsten figured she would keel over due "Giving him a curious glance, she nodded no, making sure to have her blonde curls bounce along just so with her head. “No one has been in, and I don’t know what to do?” Smiling prettily, she walked around the counter to come towards him. He shooed her away though." For the "He shooed her away, though", I think that would work better as part of the following paragraph. "Bobbing her head up and down, she was to speechless to answer, she just sat and admired her hero’s profile." Too speechless to answer.
Elizabeth Anne Ensley 2007-02-28 ch 4,	abuseMeeting a Purple-Haired Hottie By: BlackCat Trust me, it was just as much fun to read. ;-)
Motoko 2007-02-27 ch 8, anon.	abuseBest:Myriad Creative:Henred5 Mechanics:BlackCat
Jane Ellecot 2007-02-27 ch 1,	abuseHey guys, awesome job with all the stories this time, but sadly, I can only vote for a select few: Mechanics: Blackcat Original: Myriad Best: a tie between PandaKnight and Myriad. Both were awesome stories ^^ ~Jane

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