It's so cold yet the words are burning your soul. The last line (in italics) is a good idea, for it adds a little mystery and change of tone (in some way) in the end. It's quite odd but it's really good.


-C.N

P.S Thanks for the fave and review in '** Drizzles' :)

I really love that second line.. amazing job

Oh--I like it!

Something about the first 2 or 4 lines reminded me of a T.S. Eliot poem, though yours isn't as meandering or weird. Your poem is odd, but I do like it a lot. I think the last line (in italics) is a nice ending, and I didn't see it there at first--interesting tactic, and I say it succeeds. One question: The title--what's with that? Is it some reference I just don't get?

Overall, good work, and this poem really should get more reviews, but oh well. Keep it up!