Reviews for End Of The Hallway

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Liviania 2007-10-16 ch 10,	abuseExcellent little story. You don't glorify Anna's actions, but make them something real and difficult. It's quite a sad story, but it is hopeful that things are starting to repair. Livi
Otseis Ragnarok 2007-03-20 ch 10,	abuseVery well crafted story you have here, the way you dwelve into the psyche of a teenager was very intriguing. The characters themselves were great also, it really upset me that Michael had to die but it added that hint of emotion and realisim to the story. Like Anna said, this isn't some hollywood movie. My only problem here was that it seemed like there could have been more. Maybe it's just me, but things seemed to kind of rush by after they left the cafeteria. I'd have preferred it if you'd have elaborated moreon James' character as well, his death in particular seemed really empty to me. Of course, that emptiness in itself is realistic, you're not gonna suddenly get someone's life story just before they die. The ending kind of threw me for a loop though, the idea that Rosie survived and they maraculously became a couple just didn't seem to fit with the rest of the action. I'll give you this, it was quite the surprise... Overall, this was a fantastic tale. We once had this "Katie's Challenge" thing in my school where they talked about the shooting at Columbine and this one girl who basically got shot for no reason... I guess I could feel a lot of that in this story. I hope to read more of your work soon... Signed, The Amazing BlackNhite...
Meer der Sterne 2007-03-12 ch 10,	abuseA nice rounded ending. Even if there were deaths you still made it seem like a happy ending. Never suspected Rosie, but I guess that's what she wanted anyway. Loved the story. I'm adding it onto my favourites. Meer der Sterne out
neon rainbow 2007-03-12 ch 10,	abuseI was almost sad to see this finish (how else am I supposed to avoid updating my own story now?) That being said, very good story. You have more patience than I do for editing and such, and it's nice to read something that doesn't have eight hundred spelling and grammar mistakes (mine keeps changing tenses XD). The story itself was an interesting read, and you had good character development, considering how short it was. Your new story sounds good as well, and I'll be sure to read it as well. Good work.
Meer der Sterne 2007-03-09 ch 8,	abuseLate review! March break is chaotic. I was quite glad to see that you updated though. I was sad to see Michael die. James was nothing to me, but I had grown to like him. I love how you had the students fight back against Veronica, and in the end Anna came through and saved the rest of the day. It's much more powerful because you have it in first person. Seeing it from Anna's point of view really helps. Until next chapter!
An Insomniacs Rebellion 2007-03-02 ch 5,	abuseOoh, captivating. You've got me hooked. Now quit suspending me like this, and update! ~Mari
SanchezC 2007-02-27 ch 5,	abuseSixteen? More than Coloumbine. The two crazies with the guns must be pretty good shots and using .40 handguns. 9mm cartridge doesn't have that much stopping power. Guessing the girl was shot in the thigh, some major artery there I think. You need information on firearms let me know. Keep up the good work.
Patch72 2007-02-17 ch 5,	abuseChapter four...some scary stuff...excellent job describing the cafeteria. I got chills.
neon rainbow 2007-02-16 ch 5,	abuseI loved this chapter. It can be hard to get realistic reactions to things like finding a room full of corpses, but I do believe you've done it ^^ I really like this story, so keep it up! And thanks for the review
Meer der Sterne 2007-02-16 ch 5,	abuseMichael seemed to handle the massacre better than Anna, but I guess you have to take into consideration that he planned on doing something like that himself. He did pale some, so he's realizing that it is a bad thing. I like how you have a survivor. Honestly, if I was in a school shooting I'd play dead and crawl somewhere once they're gone, or try to stop them. Depends what mood I'm in... Anyway! Lovely chapter. I'd say keep writing but you've already written it out. Keep up the good editting? There. -Sterne
Meer der Sterne 2007-02-11 ch 4,	abuseYou have a very powerful story going on here. You know where your characters are coming from and that's a very good thing. I like Anna, she sounds sweet. 'Til Next, -Meer
Hidden but Seen by All 2007-02-11 ch 3,	abuseBesides the bad language(sp?) this is getting interesting
Hidden but Seen by All 2007-02-11 ch 2,	abuseok this is HORRIBLE! (what's happening not the story sorry just realized how that might sound)
Hidden but Seen by All 2007-02-11 ch 1,	abuseinteresting
SanchezC 2007-02-08 ch 4,	abuseWell. You're story is pretty good. Like that you've stuck to basic terms concerning the handgun (gun nut). Usually people pull what they know from TV and video games. I have to disagree with one statement, excluding places addressed in carry laws. 'Generally, people that brought firearms into a public place were dangerous.' Know a couple people with a license to carry. They're good people who follow laws to the letter. Like to mention something of interest. Law enforcement are people too, and some officers are not as safe with loaded firearms as most citizens. Any way, story is good. Keep up the good work.

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