Great story, i can not wait to read more, i'll be waiting for the update, hopefully i do not have to wait long? ;)

so I just read the whole thing, I love love LOVE this story... yeah you need to add more and yeah... its amazing!
there was a few errors but not much

so I JUST found your story and I normally wait till the end to reveiw (and I shall... again) but I just want to say thank you for writing this, especially the topics addressed in this chapter, It made me cry and it just helped... I feel like I should explain, my cousin came out a while back and my whole family shuned her besides me. they told her she was going straight to hell and that she was betraying the family and God. This chapter just gave me more hope that perhaps one day my family will get over themselves and accept her. Untill then I'm going to share this with her and hopefully it will help her come more to terms with herself.

so yeah... thank you

XoXo
Darcy Marie

A random image in her head of Summer being hit by a car created an actual tear. That girl has it bad.

Aargghaghaoghaghagh. Abby is such a TEENAGER! *Gives Summer a consoling pat on the head.*

I'm lmao at Abby's "I'll have you know I'm 108 pounds." Even when I was a stick I was at least twelve pounds heavier than that. I haven't been that skinny since I was like 13.

Summer's character confuses my lesbian sensitivities because on one hand my English major snobbishness makes my skin crawl at the grammar, not to mention some of the things she talks about in completely inappropriate situations, but in other parts she's almost hot (and I say almost because I find next to nothing hot so that in and of itself is a lot for me).

In this chapter Abby still seems bisexual to me. "I only thought I could get this hot over guys..." most lesbians thought they liked guys but most didn't think they actually could get hot over them, then again I could be wrong.

Best line in the story so far, “WILL YOU STOP WITH THIS WOMAN SHIT! Losin’ your virginity won’t make ya any more mature. You’ll still be a stuck up sexually confused little bitch..."

I think I have read farther than this chapter but it has been quite some time. I feel like her mother's behavior and attitude are very realistic, but some of her dialog is straight out of a "why gay is wrong" manual. Conversationally you wouldn't just say "but it is against nature to have sex with someone who is of the same sexual orientation as you are," exactly.

I love her calling him being gay "his agenda." That's so stupid and ignorant but so accurate to people like that.

If Abby just met Sheryl and doesn't know if Summer knows Cheryl, I doubt that she'd tell Summer so bluntly "I wanna touch (her boobs) so bad." It kind of feels like Meg saying "I am SO into girls" during Family Guy. I think it's great that you're capturing how girls can talk nasty talk that's reserved for guys mostly, but I'm not quite sure if this part seems right.

As it stands in the story, I see Abby as a confused teenager but I'm not 100% convinced she's a complete lesbian. It seems like boys were the most important thing in the world to her yesterday and now there's Summer. That's fine as long as you account for the speed and unsureness about that.

In some ways, Abby is way too familiar to me.

OmG awesome i loved this story i hope to read more soon. I think there a cut cupple but abby needs to chill out and go will the flow but love it!

Fwee, I can't wait to see what you have instored for us next! Been awhile since I've gotten a chance to sit and read and just so happen when I got on tonight I saw you updated.

Ive read this story through, and as much as I love contributors to lesbian fiction, theres something about this that bothers me. I liked the start, but now its becoming extremely apparent...

You are writing in a masculine tone.

I have nothing against men writing in a female point of view - one of my favorite authors mangaed to do so in such a perfect fashion that I had to look him up to make the he was actually male!

But when you write in a female point of view, but your turn-of-phrase has a masculine edge to it, it throws me off. Also, the actions that some of the characters take seem to be very male sometimes.

Not diminishing your prowess as a writer, I'm sure, but there are always things that people need to work on. I definitely think that either writing objectively, or in a feminine style, is something that you need to work on.

Who's awesome? You are!! Seriously, you just made my day.

Lol, when Summer's mom was talking about her pie rofl! Oh man, that's funny stuff.

Lmao. Poor Abby and Summer, their emotions are all outta whack. I can't wait to see what you do next.
Elodie~

Lol, I always forget about how short of time this all takes place in. Anyways, can't wait for the next chapter. :D Can't wait for more lesbian goodness. >.> *Avoid saying much else as to not spoil it for people*

-Mikie.

def didnt see that coming.. sex w/ maja. i hope its hott haha. but seriously, when are summer and abby going to be happy together? =(

Abby really has diarrea of the mouth, doesn't she. Summer was being kind of... i don't know how to explain it but if my boyfriend told me to go out and sleep with someone else, I woulda been like wth? I can't for the next chapter. I really wish you'd update faster though. This story is great on exponential level X)