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| Chrissy 2008-05-18 ch 1, anon. | abusei really love this story. one of the best vampire fictions ive read in a long time. update soon please! |
| Danielle 2008-05-02 ch 3, anon. | abuseamazing. |
| Shadepray 2008-04-25 ch 9,  | abuseVery good, a few grammer and sentence structure mistakes that i caught that spellcheck wouldnt but im glad that you finally put this one up lol i was waiting for a good while... |
| Carmel March 2008-02-24 ch 9, | abuseLovely job. You've got a serious talent! Keep it up. I'm loving it :) ~Carm~ |
| Sam 2008-02-23 ch 9, anon. | abuseTHANK YOU for finally updating this is one of my FAV. stories. I really LOVW Damien!Callie is cool too...but this story ROX MY SOX! |
| Elevanya 2008-02-22 ch 9, | abuseYay! you updated(it's about time), awesome chapter. are you coming to Portraits, you better be, or I'll drain your blood! Anyway, The Pit sounds like a fun place to be...update soon or face my wrath! |
| Dooks 2008-02-22 ch 9, | abuseIt is really good! i have been waiting for a new post! i like that u did the baltimore thing. my grandmother has an accent like that and we drive her insane for saying 'zink' instead of sink |
| HeatherLee 2008-02-22 ch 9, | abusealright well im just going to run through a couple of minor mistakes before i give my real opinion: 1)"Damien asked cheerily" (i might have said "Cheerfully" here instead of "Cheerily") 2)"I didn’t have to deal with his hurt anymore. I didn’t have to deal with his hurt anymore." (its just that you have that sentence typed twice) 3)"Hr always showed when he was angry" (just a typo) 4) btw, what show were you talking about? did you just make it up? 5)" there were some big situational differences between these two things," (i wouldn't say "things" here, i would probably say "situations" or something like that) 6)"And a feeling in the back of my throat told me that some orange juice was going to cut it." (i think you meant "wasn't going to cut it") 7)"Maybe because you need to feed in order to liveMaybe because you’re killing killers?" (i know its dumb, but you just missed a space here) 8)"I nodded, needing to ask who he was referring to." (i think you meant to put a "not" after "nodded" and "needing") 9)"The would did not need any more Damiens.' ("world" not "would" 10)"Yeah. Born and raised in Manhattan. What about you guys?”" (you missed the beginning quotations here) alright well those are all the mistakes i found. all in all i LOVE your story and im SO glad you finally updated, i was beginning to get worried. i thought that part about the bacon was HYSTERICAL! and im guessing that Damien isnt telling Callie the full reason for him changing her hmm? anyway, dont spoil it, i'll just wait for the rest of the story which i hope is SOON! keep writing because you are doing a great job and this story is highly entertaining and well written. ~Heather |
| Moonlit Promise 2008-01-29 ch 1, | abuseooh, i like this story. i'll keep reading it. :] |
| Vampires Bane 2008-01-25 ch 8, | abusekeep up the good work. The story's great, i was surprised when i read it was a nigthmare. Please continue, and if you need any charcters, ever for this story, give me some basic deatils, and i'll write you a bio for that charcter. VB~ |
| objectivebias 2008-01-22 ch 6, | abuseUgh...techno... Nice touch with the duck.Haha |
| objectivebias 2008-01-22 ch 5, | abuseDramatic stuff, Damien's past. |
| objectivebias 2008-01-22 ch 4, | abuseOh cliffhanger! |
| objectivebias 2008-01-22 ch 3, | abuseGood stuff. It really sucks to be Callie. |
| objectivebias 2008-01-22 ch 2, | abuseI'm still liking it. Good job. |