I really like this poem- mostly becasue oh the fact that it's so abstract. Structural-wise, I like the idea of the three line stanzas. However, it'd be even cooler if there was a pattern to them, such as number of syllables or ryhming.

Ok, I'm confused. I guess it doesn't really help that I'm half asleep, though. Something about a broken-winged thing trying to fly and failing miserably?

I need help!

Don't hit me...

Powerful and evocative. I'm not normally into poetry, but this stirred my soul, especially since this poem is a fairly accurate representation of my state last night. (Although I always feel like crap when I stay up to late.)

Strangely enough, I felt uncannily alive this morning. In an instant, the secret to life came to me: jumping. Any sort of vertical motion helps. Lamenting does no good, even if it's the only thing left to do. I can't explain why, but I'm happy now. It's a good thing I didn't write this review last night.

Well written. Very sad indeed. :( Always keep writing!

~Anna~ ^_^