Good start buddy... good introduction to the characters, etc. I'm excited to see where this goes.

Have you ever read the novel War Dogs?

This story opens just like that one does. Pretty cool, actually. I LOVE IT when people do their homework before making a military-related story :)

That was a great story! I loved how you made the characters realistic, the storyline was intresting,and your descriptions were wonderful. There was some grammar problems though, but other than that supurb! I hope you write more.