|Reviews for Undercurrent|
| DarkBlysse 4/25/07 . chapter 1
Hey, let's get this review started, shall we?
The first thing I can see is that this poem's got a nice, loose and airy flow to it. It's really nice, I think, and makes it easy and fun to read.
"And I wonder why, why... why is it gone?"-I really like the repitition of 'why' in this line. It really presses the emotion on the reader and makes it all the more heart-felt.
"And I see the undercurrent of tension
Grow a little more
And you nod and say that I’m right.
Wise words."-I love this stanza. It's easily my favorite part. I can't quite explain why I like it, though. Maybe it's the sparsity of the last line; the simplicity of it. Nevertheless, I love it to bits. _
Beautiful. Just perfect. I'm so glad I stumbled onto your profile and took a venture to read this. Keep up the poetry, you're really good at it!
| ziva-in-the-rain 4/16/07 . chapter 1
Wow! :O So angsty and I love it! You know I can relate to this too...having ppl in my life like that and some I dont even know...but whatever.
I love the story, keep up the great work! :]
| Perriwinkle-Bubbletoes 2/3/07 . chapter 1
this is your first?...well done it's really well written,you should be proud!
| flies.like.decay 2/3/07 . chapter 1
There's my problem... It's too easy to make friends on the internet and impossible in person. They always seem fake... But maybe that's 'cause I like people better when I can't see them. _ It makes them so much easier to talk to... and so much easier to let go of when you make a mistake. Lol.