I have to ask... Are you IN Band, or have you been in the past? This piece is good (though rushed), but out of Band character. The director didn't yell at Akane for being two hours late or punish her accordingly. *Tsk tsk tsk* Silly American Pie fanatics think that the Band Camp movie is so correct and almight.

2/10 for effort but lack of ~correct~ details.

This is pretty good, it has opportunities. But, you need to not rush things. Explain things better. Write descriptions. Don't rush!

Hm...seems interesting. You should continue.