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| paputsza 2007-10-01 ch 3,  | abuseomg, please update this. It's actually really cute. I like the protagonist. XD |
| lilylupin7 2007-05-21 ch 3, | abuseAw Meri is a sweetheart |
| sporkess 2007-05-21 ch 3, | abuseI love this story more and more with every chapter. Your cast of characters is fantastic, I don't know how you do it. I can hardly wait for further developments! |
| Chainlinks 2007-05-20 ch 3, | abuseOh! I loveloveloved it! Meri is just plain beyond fantastic and her bag has me totally intrigued. I adore Kit and Yain as well. I giggle every single time Kit intentionally yanks Yain around. |
| Wolf bathed in Star-light 2007-05-20 ch 3, | abuseoh! update soon! update soon! jessi like this story. jessi likes it a lot! jessi x |
| Wolf bathed in Star-light 2007-05-18 ch 2, | abuseoh i like! tis kewl so far. i want kit's hair! please update soon! |
| Lady E 2007-03-19 ch 2, | abuseA really good introduction to Aldys, diving straight into his conflict without wasting time on long-winded description of character or background but rather, slipping details in along the way. I don't know how you do it, but it's effective. "Aldys tried to look as persistent as possible." - LOL! These lines bring some great imagery to mind. "People who can’t figure out why their shadow’s following them know enough to have charms in a store." - Cleverly worded, though it took me two reads to understand. "It’s not my fault you didn’t teach your son not to touch things that don’t belong to him." - Like he should be talking, really. Whatever his innumerable other personality flaws, at least miserly and greedy are not Kitling traits. He barely seems to be thinking anything of the gold coming from his hair, seeing it as just a stroke of luck that he has this bit of convenience on his side. I am trying to match the characters introduced in this chapter to the ones briefly and anonymously mentioned at the beginning of the first chapter, but so far, the only one I can take a stab at is, "...two wanderers, caught up in a spell they can't break, unknowingly put themselves in the path of the one individual who can save them..." Sounds like Kit and Yain, with Aldys on their tails. You certainly seem to know where you're going with this, and I'm jumping on the bandwagon. Good luck! |
| Lady E 2007-03-19 ch 1, | abuseHaha. Even had this not been so good a beginning, I would read on anyway for the mere fact that our main character is named "Kitling." :P I am so glad no one does that to their children nowadays. You've got the modern fairytale style down all around, and this looks like it will be a blast to read. "He tried kicking the back of the man's knee, but Herrin was very possibly part mountain. He probably didn't have nerves." - Poor kid, having to deal with the progeny of mountains. |
| ficcentricity 2007-03-09 ch 2, anon. | abuseYou're one of the reasons why I still keep going back to :) I enjoyed this so much; Kit is my favorite. Prickly, grumpy, and his random bursts of temper are hilarious and endearing. |
| A Scarred Soul 2007-03-04 ch 2, | abuseHa! Twas wonderbar! Luffed it, so write more! |
| lilylupin7 2007-03-03 ch 2, | abuseThis story is amazing. Update soon |
| sporkess 2007-03-02 ch 2, | abuseThis story is so crazy and great. I honestly have no notion of where it's going, but it's amusing, and your characters are great, so I know that however your plot evolves I'll enjoy it all the way. I hope you update soon. |
| Chainlinks 2007-03-02 ch 2, | abuseI love it! Aldys is absolutely adorable and Kit "kidnapping" Yain was just great. I can't wait to see how this all plays out! |
| D. Empress 2007-03-01 ch 2, | abuseLove the personality these characters have. |
| ola 2007-02-27 ch 1, | abusehahaha, nice begining =) makes me really curious as to how you'll take it from now on. please keep posting! |