Pretty solid, Dawley.

I'm liking the new writing style. Much more coherent - I can tell what's going on. I have to say, that after reading this first chapter, you've got me wanting more. Standing by for the next update. Until then,

CK

MN: I have two Words! Up DATE.
Uni: uh, that's one word MN.
MN: -.- Sod off bookworm.
Merla: *rolls eyes* I thouroughly enjoyed that Daw!!
Uni: yes, you have done a very good job with this.
Merla: I can't wait for the next chapter!!
MN: Yeah! So you BETTER update!

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