omg... that's disturbing, since I've been reading about ancient battles all morning. but anyways, good job. conveys an image of winter and pain... but that's my interpretation, not sure if it's accurate.

you should definitely keep writing!

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I loved the simile. Love, love, loved it.

It's very nice

Beautiful in an angsty kind of way. I like.

cold

This is so beautifully written and unique. I love this, keep writing. And thanks so much for the review.

a tornado's aftermath?

nice...

The striking image this conveys is breathtaking.

Nice haiku even without the traditional syllable count. I'm not sure if it has an underlying message (it probably does, and I'm probably missing it completely) but I like the descriptions.

rather disturbing imagery.

haha it's funny because this actually reminds me of a storyline from a show called "Inu-yasha" that I used to watch. Okay, now that was my random line for the day.

I'm not sure the message you're trying to convey here. Perhaps the fact that the earth is pained from the trees jutting out of it? Or maybe it's just the physical description, and a metaphor of the arrows to go with it. Perhaps next time, when taking such a vague concept, sometimes it's required that you have a couple more lines to establish the feel and give a more solid sense of what the poem's about.

All in all, good job! Keep on writing!