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| VolleyballGurl212 2008-06-17 ch 1, | abuseThis was cute. I noticed, though, that at first you describe Jack as having deep brown hair and bright green eyes, but after the page division/break thing (e.i. the line across the page, i'm not sure what you would call it...) you say he has honey eyes and raven hair. Not a big problem but I just wanted you to know. This story as well as the rest of your work is amazing! keep up the good work! |
| vballgurl 2008-06-06 ch 1, | abuseHOLY CRAP! that was an AMAZING first sentence! Can I steal it?!? and sappy is okay :) |
| Laura Schiller 2008-03-03 ch 1, | abuseAww...a nice classic romance never goes out of style. I like the language too. |
| milenaa 2008-02-15 ch 1, | abuseWell, it's a Valentine's Day one-shot, it's supposed to turn out this way, isn't it? nice writing. |
| Inkhearts and Inkstains 2008-01-08 ch 1, | abuseI like this one to, your good at oneshots. |
| StarSplit144 2007-02-14 ch 1, | abuseJack, the air-force officer eh? Yeah maybe a little sappy, but its valentines day. Have some fun ~StarSplit |
| Callisto Jean 2007-02-11 ch 1, | abuseWhat can I say other than wow? So here goes... WOW! It was very sweet and realistic. I can imagine everything so clearly in my mind. It's almost as if I were Beth herself. You did a wonderful job. You must be very proud of this piece! Oh, thank you for reading and reviewing my story. I hope you'll find time to read the others since Cruising Green Waters will be coming to a drastic end soon. :) |