True thoughts, I'm not sure if you should express them with the medium of a poem, though.

I concur - it lost mementum half way through. And, also, I am a big fan of rhyme, and this "free style" just doesn't suit my ears very well.

Nice job, and keep going. Just don't give up, cause that'd be a shame.

The problem with war is one Country rarely folds. Very well wrote, though.

I like this. Amazing Job.
~PottersSweetie17

this is a nice metaphor but halway through the flow lost momentum...i think this would be much better if it were more poetic ...but an interesting concept