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| amy 2008-06-26 ch 9, anon. | abuseplease, please update soon! i love this story. |
| Heloise 2008-06-24 ch 9, | abuseSecretive! Where are you!? You haven't updated in forever, LOL. I miss reading your writing. Come back soon. - Heloise |
| Camelia Sinensis 2008-06-24 ch 9, | abuseI'm just downright loving it so far. Spencer's so damn cute. It's kinda predictable, but I like it so much & it's so well written i don't even care. Post soon! |
| volcomrebel 2008-06-22 ch 9, | abusethis story is soo adorable and funny! |
| wake of beauty 2008-06-20 ch 9, | abuseLove it. =) |
| RedCinderella 2008-05-27 ch 9, | abuseI love it! please update soon |
| Pione 2008-05-25 ch 9, | abuseI like it! This story cracked me up!! :) |
| Channah 2008-05-12 ch 9, | abuseAw, I really don't like Ana... Willa and Spencer's verbal sparrings are always a lot of fun. LOL I really like them. Can't wait for the next chapter! |
| SamanthaNicole 2008-05-11 ch 1, | abuseI was profile-hopping, and happened to stumble across this and decided to give it a read. Needless to say, I'm glad I did. I've seen your name bounced around a few times, I just never got around to looking you up. Big mistake on my part. Anyway, I digress. This is a really great prologue. Interesting? Yes. Captivating? Yes. Interesting characters? Yes. And great writing to boot. I loved the line, 'I would have vetoed his ** quicker than you can say "popcorn."' I had a lot of favorites, but that one takes the cake. And can I just say that I adore the name Spencer Romero? Really nice. Also, major props on writing first person. That's what all of my stories tend to be, so I'm definitely biased, haha. But you do it really well, and it makes it a lot easer to relate to your characters, which you do an excellent job of, regardless. The whole bit about Ricky Ricardo? Genius. Though, I have to say, I adored I Love Lucy (just ordered the first season on DVD), so I disagree with your main character's opinion (and most likely yours, too), haha ;-) In any case, I already adore this story. Lovely, lovely job, m'dear. Love, Sammy |
| Chiclets 2008-05-02 ch 9, | abuseMy gosh! I was eating a pretzel at the same time Willa choked on her Pepsi. Not healthy. Not healthy. *ow...* That's awesome. Her dad is scary. Snaps to Spence who's holding up. And to you for writing so awesomely. Wish you'd update more, but that can't be helped. Writing in short sentences because my head hurts. Dunno how that's related, but it is. Shut up. Right. Lookit, your female characters are affecting the way I talk. I'll shut up and go away now. I'd better have a reason to be back soon! :P |
| I Murder on Impulse 2008-05-02 ch 9, | abuseHaha dads funny lol xx |
| Sonya 2008-04-30 ch 9, anon. | abuseI love all your stories! please update soon! |
| shadowgirl618 2008-04-30 ch 9, | abuseI love this story so far! I crack up at the most random times (well, random to ppl that happen to be sitting next to me) and it's just awesome. =] I hope you update son! .shad |
| a beginner 2008-04-26 ch 9, | abusei havnt read all chapters as i accidently got here, but also luckily... and by the look of ur reviewer's number, i definitly have to completely read it... but as i was just logging off, im sure as soon as i come back, ur creativity is the first priority... altalavista |
| Gonzogrig 2008-04-25 ch 9, | abuseVery cute. could use some cleaning up but still enjoyable. It would make more sense plotwise if Spencers girlfriend was a slightly more prominent character, even if she's always shown rushing to classes or studying. The whole 'I've liked this other girl for two years but I don't have a chance' really confused me since you seemed to be building up to him admiting he likes willa, but I'm assuming that will be explained later. One thing you keep doing is spending large paragraphs on physical descriptions that don't seem relavent to to current action. works better if you simply casually mention details when appropriate. The whole 'guys cry at the touch of me' bit was a bit much in my opinion, but I do like the parts when spencer invades her personal space. keep going |