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Ironic Presence 2008-04-30 . chapter 16
I really like this poem. It's short, sweet, and goes to the point, and quite eloquently at that. ;)
Runaway Soul 2008-02-20 . chapter 4
This poem, A Knowledge Paradox, is especially striking. And very true--how you can be with a large group of people and yet be alone all the same. With that in mind, I especially love the final stanza, not to mention the paradoxes of silence being loud, and blandness being sweet.

I absolutely adore your work!
Ironic Presence 2007-05-12 . chapter 15
You had be cracking up in spots. Rather creative. I love "And then I feel...Just mad".

Are the Cubs and Cardinals rivals? I don't know much about baseball rivalry besides the Yanks and the Red Sox. :)

Oh, iambs and trochees. I never use them, save in Latin when I'm scanning meter...hendecasyllabic (I can never say that in real life) and elegiac... and dextameter.

I definitely feel the same way about some of your least favorite things. I just took my AP History exam after a week long of cramming, so when you mentioned "French Revolution and Enlightenment"...ugh... it just reminded me of history again. Argh.

Ok, I'm done doing my fair share of driveling on your site. Farewell for now.

Presence
Bitter Irony 2007-05-04 . chapter 10
There seems to be something a bit deeper than the Psyche/Eros myth here. I especially love the last line and the sort of irony that comes with it. Very nice free verse.

~Bitter Irony
Ironic Presence 2007-05-02 . chapter 14
Wow. I really like this one. I'm still trying to decipher exactly what the ending means...just like I'm still trying to figure out what that last line in your story about Mordecai means! :P
Good imagery. Keep up the good work.

Presence
outinarizona 2007-05-01 . chapter 12
It's about time someone stood up for those oft-abused and misused states of being.
Ironic Presence 2007-03-31 . chapter 13
First of all, I like how the poem format sort of looks like upward arrows, as though you're telling the reader to look up to God. If that was intentional, it was very clever. ;)
I really like this poem. It has a calming effect, and it's very true.
Update soon.
Ironic Presence 2007-03-20 . chapter 12
Very true, and if one thought about it a longer while, I think one could find it indeed VERY profound (I would italicize the all-caps "very" if I could, because now it looks like I'm shouting rather than emphasizing). I was thinking "Hate" should have been added, but that goes with "And associates".
I like the P.S. too, by the way.
antigonelives 2007-03-18 . chapter 3
This sort of reminds me of an author's relationship with a reader through poetry -- and even here, I get "a flicker, a little understanding" of the poem and what you're trying to say through it. I'll never really know what this is about, will I?
~Cristina
phantom-jedi 2007-03-18 . chapter 12
Quite amusing! I liked the slightly clipped, formal style.

phantom_jedi
Ironic Presence 2007-02-19 . chapter 11
Alas, is that not how most people of this world are? I'm always afraid that this is how I'll end up in the end, and I pray to God I don't... yet, it's always possible, which is tragic and sad. Very, very true poem.
Ironic Presence 2007-02-19 . chapter 10
Though I'm not well-versed with the myth of Psyche/Cupid, I've heard of it before.
Interesting poem... I think I'd appreciate it more if I knew the myth of Cupid/Psyche, which I hope someday I will.
phantom-jedi 2007-02-18 . chapter 8
Wonderful little poem! The last line is quite true. Keep up the good work!

phantom_jedi
Ironic Presence 2007-02-16 . chapter 9
Ok, this is for poem 3 on...
Poem 3. Wow. It didn't hit me until after I read it how good your poem was: not for meter, not for rhyme, but for its simplicity and truth. I couldn't believe it.
Poem 4. Hm... you've got quite the paradox going on there.
Poem 5. Latin: "Now you send away", correct? But the poem was beautiful. I have honestly been trying to go forth and be something more than just a statue of truth, so I could relate to this. Send your servant!
Poem 6. Hmm... sounds sort of like Hamlet "Adieu, adieu, remember me"... and the other plays off it? Julius Caesar. "Hear me..."
I'm probably wrong in both respects. ;)
Poem 7. That was also beautiful. :,) (ok, that's supposed to look like a tear and not a nose or pimple)
Poem 8. I never thought of it that way before. Hm... that changes my perspective a little. Perhaps you're right. I thought you were supposed to feel the thorns... hm...
Finally,
Poem 9. This is a little harder to decipher, I think. I'll figure it out eventually, hopefully...

Keep writing. I like these Drivel a la Free Verse. Let me guess what that means: Drivel in free verse, essentially, correct?
I'm probably wrong. ;)
Ironic Presence 2007-02-16 . chapter 2
So true. I can very much relate to that. The last two lines: spot on.
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