i liked that a lot. Although it didn't rhyme, it had a nice rhythm. my only problem is in this stanza:

What could of happened to earase her smile?
What could of happened to take her sun away.
Her heart was always so pure when the raise poured down upon her
Now she lives in the night, Conatining her cold cold heart

in the 1st two lines in should be 'what could have', a common mistake and erase and containing are spelled wrong, but it was so good, it doesn't really matter.

A few typos/spelling/grammar mistakes, but I like it. Especially the last line. Write on!

-Isabella-May