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| Maximatum99 2007-11-20 ch 1, | abuseA very funny conversation! The ending was the best. People like you remind me of myself. |
| cling peach 2007-02-06 ch 1, | abuseThat cracked me up. I just loved all the excuses and retorts. “There’s rabid penguins” “Sounds fun” Probably my favorite. Made me giggle. Anyway, thanks for the snicker. Nice little piece. Keep writing. ;) |
| Nemonus 2007-02-05 ch 1, | abuseLOL! That might be the strangest thing I've ever read. It is extremely funny, in that way of strangeness. The use of only dialogue and of strange names, and of phrases wherein the reader's not sure whether the characters are talking about a fantasy RPG or real life, make this very intriguing atmosphere. Some grammar problems: "“There’s rabid penguins”" should say 'There're' and have a period at the end. "coughliecough" is a good descriptor, per se, but I don't think it works in prose. ("“And caffeinated orcs.”lol!!) Lots of other phrases, usually of the warrior's dialogue, need periods at the end. Good story-thing, though. :) |
| Ashayla Noel 2007-02-05 ch 1, | abuseThat's cute! It's like discussing s R-P Game or something like that. I like it! |