Reviews for Take It to the Grave

Ironic Presence 2007-04-05 ch 1,	abuseQuite morbid, quite cynical, quite dark. Perhaps too true for words... or too false. Loved the rhyme scheme. Flowed very well. How does everyone manage to get rid of the stupid double space thing this site does for you when you submit poetry? I've never been able to figure that out, and it's starting to bug me.
magnusthewolf 2007-02-05 ch 1,	abusevery interesting and unique concept you have here...a bit morbid, but still very nicely done ;) magnus
Midnight In Eden 2007-02-05 ch 1,	abuseOverall it's not bad, but I think your rhyming couplets would work better in four line offset stanzas ie: Woke up this morning with a smile on my face (comma here) From comfort and warmth in my own embrace. The day may be quiet, the night spent at home. Futile to wait for a call by the phone. All i know is me, (should be an I also) myself, and I, (don't need the comma before the "and") But I love myself, so I don't need to cry. And when I die, I won't mind being forgotten. Alone in the womb. Alone in the coffin. Just made some punctuation notes as well above. And perhaps you don't need the repetition of "Alone" at the end. Something like: Alone in the womb, the same in the coffin. Hopefully this was helpful. .:midnight:.