Reviews for For the love of a Vampire

Reviews For: For the love of a Vampire

The-Writing-Rose66 2007-11-13 ch 3,	abuseWow, what a story. Thanks for posting something like this!
Asia Ralaia Schiegoh 2007-03-23 ch 3,	abusePlease tell me this means you'll update! Ooh, excitement! ~ARS
SarahGibbons785 2007-03-04 ch 3,	abuseLOVE IT! its very interesting and i luv the detail of smell. and whut a creep tht one guy on the plane! well keep up the good work.
lalala676 2007-02-18 ch 1,	abuseThis is a wonderful story. I love it. Thanks a lot for the review too. Keep writing! :)
baddboy 2007-02-08 ch 1,	abuseIt's not that baddboy hasn't seen the vampire-story-opening-dream-sequence a few dozen times, but you managed to get a nice sense of Blu-ray vividity in there. Apart from several minor spelling and grammatical errors (There are quote tags in capitals, the name 'Jacqueline' is spelled differently a few times) you seem to have a nice grasp of language in general. I appreciate how characters such as Jack's mother are nicely developed. Too often, parents in FP stories concerning teenagers are perfunctory cardboard cut-outs. If Jack's mother is thirty-four, does that mean she was around seventeen herself when she had Jack? Interesting. I'm enjoying the build-up so far, especially the airplane sequence with the flaky stewardess, although I found the 'rapist' sentance to be a little poorly written. Also, the word 'inhuman' is usually associated with something evil or barbaric, not, as you described this chap's voice, things that are heavenly. Try replacing that word with something along the lines of 'unearthly'. This one is also completely up to you, but baddboy finds that it would sound far more effective if you removed the tags (that's 'I thought') when Jackie, erm, 'thinks to herself'. Maybe I'm alone on this. The best line? 'I needed to get some big curtains'. If you would like me to review further chapters, just send me a reply or a PM. :D
Asia Ralaia Schiegoh 2007-02-07 ch 1,	abuseAre you a dude? If you're not, feel free to virtually slap me. If you are; DUDE! I've been waiting for some guys to hit up wit' a pen and paper and start writin' down the creations of their chimera. Well done! And if you're a chick; same thing applies! And my bad if I mistook you for a man, all the apologies in the world to ya. And hey; if you dig Vampire Romance, you'd probably like Mother of the Heir. His love dies in his arms, too, but it's told from a female POV. And she's Ebony, not French. Heh. Straight to the favorites you go! ~ARS
CarlyJo 2007-02-07 ch 3,	abuseGreat chapter. The wierd thing is I was going to use New York too! Update soon!
CarlyJo 2007-02-06 ch 2,	abuseGreat Story. I love the charactors so far. Update Soon! =:3 )

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