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| Dani P 2007-03-22 ch 1,  | abusenice intro so far. love the first paragraph and the part about the bloody locket and the heart that can't feel the warmth. can't wait to see where this is going |
| Jon Lassik 2007-02-06 ch 1, | abuseYes, sorry about the gramatical errors. I might have to re-submit the story to correct them. Thanks for bringing it to my attention, and thanks for the review! |
| Kelaia 2007-02-06 ch 1, | abuseI think its good. I like all the description you've put in, and how you've made it interestig even though not that much happens. Just the last sentence "The water warm" didn't really make sense. Is it missing a verb? I'll definitely be up for reading another chapter! |