Reviews for Plankton and Seaweed

Chaotic Charisma
2007-02-09
ch 1,

abuselol so this year's sucked for you too huh?
Anyway... I like the idea and the content of this piece... I won't lie to you I think your flow's a little off on this one... then again... choppy waves of the ocean = the ebb and flow of this piece? Depends on how you interpret it.
I think it's interesting you never say anything about being in the dark in-between space between the plankton and the seaweed. You know, where the water is. Feels like that's where the people are.
I like how the first part seems to be a conversation, and the second part is all about a physical act of drowning. I get the impression that, from "Where is my lifevest" on, you're not really talking to her, it's kind of an ending in your head. But again, that's the interpretation thing.
I also like how "darling I'm drowning" sounds. And the lines "Amidst these giant sea swells/ among these tiny life forms."

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