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| Rainpuddle 2008-01-04 ch 1,  | abuse... this is the sound of me being blown away... |
| notated descant. 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abusethe brackets between each main line gives it an undertone of desperation- like you're trying to stay calm, but you're restless and desperate on the inside. Effective! Good job! |
| Osunale 2007-02-10 ch 1, | abuse"You're just a hitch in my mind control" is a wonderful line - immensely descriptive, and oh-so right. I see that you've left me plenty of poems to catch up on...I'll get to them all eventually. |