|Reviews for Shorty McShort's Shorts|
| MizSphinx 5/22/07 . chapter 1
Lmao, now that was hilarious. I especially loved the part about the mother and the code lol. Reading on...
| I Quoth Nevermore 3/26/07 . chapter 4
Aw. That was so...hm, I don't know what word to use, but I liked it. I like short little stories about people when they get to the end of their life and regret things. I want to say I've read a book with the name Bartleby, but I can't remember.
I like how these stories are just a small scene in the characters lives. You let the readers use their imagination to fill in the past and future. I'd have to say I liked the first one best. Then this, the one with the guy dating, and the Felicita one. I would put Felicita's story third, but I didn't fully understand it. Sorry.
I hope you add more to this.
P.S. Sorry I tend to talk a lot in my reviews.
| I Quoth Nevermore 3/26/07 . chapter 3
Aw. The beginning was so cute. Then the end was sad. :(
Sorry, I only have a stupid 15 year old brain, so I was a bit confused. So, his hand was deformed in the war, but how muc time passed from section one to section two that Felicita would pass away? Hmm, if you don't mind explaining that, I'd appreciate it.
| I Quoth Nevermore 3/26/07 . chapter 2
Haha. I like this one. It's like looking into the mind of a guy. It's a scary place, I might add. I love the descriptions. This guy sounds like a player, he knows exactly how to act with which type of girl. Very good. Just want to say there were some typos in here, but that's it.
| I Quoth Nevermore 3/26/07 . chapter 1
I've decided to read something else of yours, and this caught my attention. This story-How to Be a Writer-I laughed so hard. It's sort of ironic, since the last bit is about having no plot, and this story kind of just died off, not having a plot. I hope that was inplied, or else I just sounded extremely rude. SORRY! Anyways, I love the last line. I think I'm still laughing. Is this...well, I can't call it a story, since there are a bunch of stories...okay is there going to be any more stories added to this section? Great job.
| Stormie Greye 3/11/07 . chapter 4
Wow, how sad! This one has some intense emotion, the most serious one out of these short stories.
"'Why had I been so afraid of my life ending, if life has meant nothing to me?'" My favorite line out of the whole story. There's such power in that question. Makes you really question yourself when you think your life is meaningless and you say you just wanna die, but you're so afraid to.
I feel sorry for the guy in this because it seems as if it's too late for him to turn his life around and correct whatever mistakes he had made. Very nice writing. :) Do you plan on making any more of these?
By the way, I just thought I'd let you know that I added the haiku you requested if you're still interested. Oh yeah, and I changed my pen name. Didn't want to confuse you. XD!
| Stormie Greye 2/11/07 . chapter 2
Also very nice, though this one got me somewhat confused. What about, I'm not quite sure, but it might be able the types of girls the narrator was talking about. It was different to read this in a male's POV, shows how guys know when or what type of girls will give them something. I dunno, men can be pigs? Anyways, this was good overall with very minimum typos. I like how you never actually curse in this. Nice. :)
| Stormie Greye 2/11/07 . chapter 1
That's awesome! I usually don't like to read second person POV, but this one was actually very nice and read it in a flash. Is this your thoughts that there are many other important things in a piece of writing other than plots? Nonetheless, I love how you said, simply, "Plots are for dead people." Very comedic statement, and I just had to laugh. XD I also had to laugh at the person counting syllables in the haikus because I do that as well.
Good job with this. Very short, but it all summed up nicely.
| MadMaverick 2/8/07 . chapter 1
I especially like the line "plots are for dead people." The way this story is written is great - the reader gets a very clear idea of what things are like in this person's life through the words chosen. The writing is lyrical, by which I mean, I read it out loud because it sounded nice.
| Tatiana Moore 2/8/07 . chapter 4
o... I'd be waiting for death too. Nice strong line in "why had I been so afraid of my life ending, if life has meant nothing to me?" Makes you think. Makes you treasure what you have and strive to want more for your life... thank god I'm not locked up with my freedoms taken away. I couldn't imagine it. Good job.
| Tatiana Moore 2/8/07 . chapter 3
Again good... not sure if you intended to have another separation or break between "thought you'd never ask" and "Major Maggiore? Telephone." I thought it needed one, or maybe a smoother transition. Was he daydreaming all of that meeting by the tree? Maybe he was pushing himself through therapy (right?) to make her proud... I don't know, I was left a little confused... maybe you can help me figure it out.
| Tatiana Moore 2/8/07 . chapter 2
This is really good! I actually read it right after you posted it, but got to doing other things that I couldn't review. I did notice that you went through and edited it a little, right? I remember hitting a few errors the first time I read it. Anyways, I like the voice you're using here, it's clear, obviously male, and unique to me. Interested in knowing where you came up with this idea. It's great short story... I did notice one ore two more typos, but nothing big at all.
It's funny but the whole "crapped-on toilet paper" hit home with me... people do that all the time in the Valley and it's pretty gross. SO I guess if I had any questions would be to know where exactly Union City/Terrace is...
Great stuff, B, great stuff!
| Tatiana Moore 2/6/07 . chapter 1
Nice second person POV... very well done. Love the ending "plots are for dead people", very good, very clever. Was the English teacher fictional or did you really get a comment like that... i hate comments like that... like we say "SHOW ME HOW TO FIX IT!"
:) nicely done.