interesting, I really like the concept, but the way it's written is a little awkward in places.

Wow... dark and incredibely intriguing. I REALLY liked it. I love seeing all of what you are capable of accomplishig when it comes to writing; and this story proves you can write dark, horror-like genres. Quite impressive. I'm so proud of you, puppy! =^_^= I can't wait to read more of your wonderful work-- now and in the near future.

i really like the part where she inspects the blade and wretches it from him, great description. nice darling. but i dont understand who that fellow was and who killed him, was she just in like a junkie house?

wow. that was good.

Very dark, indeed, and very startling. Great word choice and selection of detail.