Okay, I believe you have really great potential...and it's almost there. It seems repetitive and the depth is real, but I would like a little more.

Good job and keep writing, though!

Favorite: "Frozen".

Aww. I know how this feels. My dad works nights so he's never home.


Jess

Bullies suck! I was bullied from grade one, but I remedied that when I started going to the gym and b*slapped that mother* to Oblivion...(I don't recommend it, violence solves nothing, we're mortal enemies now.)

Good poems, but Crimson is my favourite. Keep it up!

Aw. That's horrible, My "best friend" used to bully me. I hope it gets better for you.

Thanks for the review and

Beautiful, beautiful, just bloody beautiful. This is some real grade-A stuff you've got there! I kinda wish I could write poetry like that...alas!

-Andy

I like Chapter 2 MUCH better. These are all on the same things-death. Perhaps only keep a few of these ones and omit the others? Make sure to spell check this Chapter and Chapter 2, many spelling errors.
Ok-later-WMystic

I LOVE THEM! So well thought out and poetic, lol! Keep writing!
~WMystic

It's very dark but its good. I like the repetition ^_^

*phew*, that's some mighty depressive stuff you've got there, but I'm impressed! You convey emotion very well, unlike me. I'll wait patiently for more!

-Andy